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Review Worksheet

Review Worksheet


1.     Introduction: How does the first paragraph introduce both the paper’s topic and the writer’s approach or general conclusion? Is the first sentence attention-getting and relevant to the topic?
My first paragraph was good but I needed to explain more thus expanding it to be longer than what it really is.

2.     What can you identify as a thesis statement? (Re-write it below) Suggest, if possible, a way to improve the introduction or thesis statement.
I identify the thesis in the first sentence of the introduction “I am writing about how the food from the 19th Century was better than that of the food we eat in the 21st Century”

3.     Structure: Can you identify the organization of the paper from the main idea of each paragraph? What are the main concepts explored in the paper? Does each paragraph make a relevant point that is distinct from what has already been covered? What are the main conclusions?
According to the structure its is as introduction providing the thesis as I did and for the body

4.     Clarity/Style: Did you find distracting grammar, punctuation, spelling, or word usage problems? Identify any patterns or themes you detect. Is the tone of the essay formal? If you find awkward sentences, try to explain why they don’t make sense to you.
I had grammar, punctuation, spelling and word usage problems but have made some changes by correcting them by letting friends read them and give me their thoughts and what I can do to make it a better written essay

5.     Resources: Does the author clearly identify his/her sources? Is proper in-text and reference format used?
Yes I identified my sources clearly and even cited it in MLA format

6.     What is/are the paper’s greatest strength(s)? Explain.
I must say this is not my strongest work only because I didn’t spend as much time I expected on it to develop some key details on ingredients and food

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